This report is a copy of the version corrected by Mrs. Tanaka; the above report is the version corrected after her mass correction incident. Because of this, it is only to be taken as an example of Mrs. Tanaka's corrections.
SCP-1045-JP at time of discovery
(1)─About the caption: I have a name, you know. Please call me Mrs. Tanaka.
Item #(2): SCP-1045-JP(3)
(2)─You can't call people "items". Use "ID" instead.
(3)─While I can tell that "JP" refers to Japan, I can't tell what "SCP" refers to. In any case, since this is for the school newspaper, the number alone will do.
Object Class:(4) Safe(5)
(4)─Same thing - you can't refer to people as "objects". "In charge of:" would do here.
(5)─The name of the class is shared by all the students that belong to it. Please leave it as "Class S".
Special Containment Procedures::(6) SCP-1045-JP(7)is contained in an Electronic Containment Chamber(8)at Site-8104(9)。
(6)─Calling it "containment" makes me feel like I'm being sent to a prison or something. Since this is a school, please just write "an ordinary teacher".
(7)─Calling people by their ID is rude. Please refer to me as "Mrs. Tanaka", or just "Miss".
(8)─Please don't talk about me like a thing and not a person. Please revise this to "will be in her office when she is not teaching".
(9)─"Site" is hard to understand. "Building 8104" would be much better.
Do not bring any objects or electronic data bearing written text(10) within a 9 m16 m(1) radius (henceforth "the effective radius")(2) of SCP-1045-JP and SCP-1045-JP-a(11).
(10)─Just call them "essays". It's a school, after all, and it's easier to understand.
(11)─As far as I can tell, this refers to the essays I've marked, right? If so, referring to them as "corrected essays" would be a lot easier to understand.
(1)─Keeping the out-of-date data helps to emphasize the changes over time. Great job! (*^.^*)
(2)─This makes referring to it simpler, right? Very good!(^-^)
Instances of SCP-1045-JP-a are to be destroyed on sight.(12)
(12)─Please don't destroy my hard work. Change this to "Please resubmit marked essays as soon as possible".
Description: SCP-1045-JP is a pair of black-rimmed 1.7 diopter glasses(13)。
(13)─I am more than just my glasses. Please change this to "a woman wearing a pair of black-rimmed 1.7 diopter glasses."
Objects bearing text in Japanese or English(14) brought into the effective radius will have approximately 90% of text(15)annotated with corrections in red italics and praise in blue italics(16). These annotations persist even after the text is removed from the effective radius.(17)
(14)─"Essays" will do here.
(15)─Although I really want to be able to do that much for my students every time, but of course the amount of corrections varies depending on the text. If it's written as "approximately 90%" here, it'll need to be changed if the amount of corrections is a lot less. It's better not to mention it at all.
(16)─Do you really need to mention the italics? "Corrections will appear in red ink, and positive remarks will appear in blue ink." would be better.
(17)─Of course my comments won't just disappear. This sentence is a little unnecessary, don't you think?
Documents on which these italic comments appear (SCP-1045-JP-a)(3) will also similarly affect documents within a similarly sized effective radius(18), converting them into SCP-1045-JP(19)。
(18)─This sounds like some supernatural phenomenon, doesn't it? It's better to word it as myself being able to see and correct any document near a document I've already corrected.
(19)─Same here. Just cut this bit out.
(3)─Aside from the wording in parentheses, you've written this very well! Good job! (^^)d
The content of the annotations is focused on reflecting the state of reality. As a result, fictional and metaphorical content will be corrected to be more realistic or otherwise reflective of reality.(20)。
(20)─This is obvious - add "of course" so you don't make the reader feel like you're insulting their intelligence.
If SCP-1045-JP-a instances are not revised in line with the corrections within 32 16 hours,(4)the document will be forcibly corrected, the effective radius will increase and the time limit will be shortened(21).
(21)─Please add "as a disciplinary measure" to emphasize the reasoning behind it. It's not like I don't have my reasons.
(4)─This is very nice too! Although there's no name written so I don't know who it is, I'd like to praise whoever wrote this!(^-^)ゝ゛
It is impossible to delete the corrections;(22) only physical destruction of affected documents will prevent the effects.(23)
(22)─It's not "impossible", it's just not allowed. This makes it seem like some sort of supernatural phenomenon. Please correct it.
(23)─True, but it hurts me to know you're just throwing away my hard work like that. Please remind the reader not to do so.
Addendum 1:(24) SCP-1045-JP was discovered in an apartment in ██████ City, ███████ Prefecture(25) in the room of a female teacher who had [REDACTED] of [DATA EXPUNGED] on 20██/██/██.(26) Her family had visited in order to retrieve items she had left behind following her death.(27)。
(24)─"Addendum" is quite an obscure word. "Note" serves the same purpose and is easier to understand.
(25)─I don't get why you blacked this out. If you're not going to show it in the end, why bother writing it to begin with?
(26)─Same thing. Delete these.
(27)─This may be true, but please don't include this kind of personal information in a tex that's meant to be read by a lot of people. If it's absolutely necessary, keep it, but try to cut down on how much you say, please.
At the time, all the documents in the room and some of the documents in the adjacent room had been forcibly corrected, and even the contacts list on the relatives' smartphones had also been annotated.(28) As a result, SCP-1945-JP was discovered and contained.(29)When interviewed, other teachers at her workplace stated that "she had always made careful corrections to her students' work, but she felt it was an obligation and was frustrated when she couldn't do so."(30) The connection to SCP-1045-JP is unknown. Her family and neighbors were administered Class-A amnestics.(31)
(28)─Same thing. Remove it.
(29)─I am not a thing. "Discovered and instated to her new position" is more appropriate.
(30)─Unnecessary. Remove it.
(31)─"Amnestics"… I don't know what it means, and it probably doesn't exist. Please don't write things that don't exist.
～Summary～
I could tell you were describing me like an object. Writing about people like objects is rude and it shouldn't be done. However, there were some good points too, so please take note of that and do a good job for me! (^-^)ゝ゛
(The deadline is Wednesday, May 18th, before morning homeroom.)
